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some people think that parents should teach the children how to be good members of society. others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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In many countries, parents think that their children need to go to
school
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 to get their
education
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 and experience. Some people believe that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society,
however
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 the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
think
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thinks
 that the children
have learnt
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have learned
this
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 in their
education
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. In
this
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essay write
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essay, write
 about
advantages
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the advantages
 and disadvantages of the people should teach their daughter and son
.
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.
First
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 of all, some parents think that they need to explain or teach their children by their own because the child listened their than the other.
Moreover
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,
older generation
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the older generation
 can tell them about the good things and the bad things that
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adult
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adults
need
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needs
 to follow them.
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, the Cambodian older find
the good
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the best
better
way
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 for their children to follow because they know the
this
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way
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 is the best
way
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. Parents will choose
the good
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the best
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education
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education, such
such
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 as primary
school
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, high
school
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 and university because they can research and ask their friends.
On the other hand
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, people think that the
education
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 should teach
younger generation
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younger generations
the younger generation
 about how to be a good person in their life. In the addition, some
adult
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 listened their teacher than listened their parents. By
this
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way
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, the children think that they can do anything without their parents because they are thinking that they grow up and they can live alone especially the European countries.
In
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Of
 there, the
adult
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 can move out when they
was
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were
 18 years old so they can learn about their grow. They can think and do want ever they want. In conclusion, the younger generation should listen and learn something from their parents and they can study from their teacher or the other people. In my opinion
,
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, an adult should
adult
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 should learn how to be a good person in the social form the
school
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 because their parents were busy with working so they don't have enough time to teach them.
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, if they had time to teach their children, they would teach them too, because the children need the warm shoulder from their parents.

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