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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
It is sometimes argued that because of the rocketing development of technology, public libraries should be replaced in order not to waste money of the government. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
 view. On the one hand, the development of technology upgrades the
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 information level of human. It is true that computers nowadays help to save many big data for a long time without human support.
Besides
, the sources of information are getting easier and easier for approaching since the
popular
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popularity
 of computer. In
this
 modern and age, up-to-date reading materials
is accessed
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are accessed
 effortlessly so that many people can learn and research directly at home.
However
, there are still many normative values of traditional libraries that computers cannot take over.
First
, in physical libraries it is not difficult to find comfortable and
quite
with little or no activity or no agitation ('quiet' is a nonstandard variant for 'quietly')
quiet
 spaces for
high
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highly
 concentrated learning. In fact, since the increasing number of sources of noise surrounding us these days, many people
choose
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chooses
 to learn and work
at
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in
 public libraries.
Secondly
, traditional libraries are the best places for saving and preserving the valuable handwritings from the past.
Moreover
, library users have access to more reliable sources of information. A great deal of online content we have today, meanwhile, is not censored, which possibly leads to a misinformed public. In conclusion, we can take many advantages from the digital age, but the
maintanence
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
 of public libraries is essential and worthy to any countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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