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the government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to eat food that is will benefit to their health. do you agree or disagree?

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The government should motivate individuals to include healthy
food
 by taxing
junk
food
. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
 statement.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons for my opinion. One reason an increase in tax will not discourage people from eating unhealthy
food
 is because many individuals are time-poor. Most healthy foods require time to prepare, from the purchasing of the ingredients to the actual preparation of the
food
 and these processes consumes time, which individuals cannot afford, especially the people with full-time jobs.
For instance
, a recent survey done in England showed that one-
third
 of individuals would rather buy
junk
 because they cannot afford to set apart time to cook.
As a result
, they prefer buying and eating
junk
food
 which is ready made and can be eaten on the move. Another reason a higher tariff will not discourage people from eating unhealthy
food
 is addictive. Some individuals are addicted to eating
junk
 and just like cigarette addiction, they need a daily dose of unhealthy diet to function, without which they shut down. An example of persons in
this
 category is my younger brother, who
although
 was diabetic, ate only foods that were detrimental to his health, even with his doctor's advice on which meals to avoid.
This
 went on, until his psychologist diagnosed him as addicted to unhealthy meals.
Hence
, it is clear from
this
 example that some persons will not be discouraged from consuming unhealthy foods because of an increase in tariffs. In conclusion, I maintain the view that an increase in tax will not encourage people to consume healthier
food
 options for reasons discussed in
this
 essay.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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