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There are many different types of music today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of the country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays.

#music #country
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Humans have endless requirements,
besides
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 fundamentals entertainment is equally needed to live a contended life, and
music
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 is the crux to entertaining
world
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. Countless compositions are available in the modern
world
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 and in my opinion with international songs taking over
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world
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the world
,
traditional
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traditionally
traditions
 have their significance too which is hard to debate. Starting with traditional
music
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, it depicts the culture and time of
certain era
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a certain era
certain eras
, right from
16th 17th
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16th, 17th
 century
music
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 has served different occasion,
for example
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, Afghans used huge drums in the war to communicate with their army,
similarly
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 victory has different notes, marriages and funerals have their own. As time changed, so did the
music
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 industry, it turned out to be
money making business
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a money making business
, and lot of youths went bonkers over making it as a professional career. It required a high level of creativity as it is ever progressing field and that made
rise
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the rise
 of western
music
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 which we hear nowadays on every broadcasting medium.
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 emphasizing, with advancement of time
music
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 started developing drastically from classical to modern hip-hop, rock, jazz et cetera. And technology and internet facility made it cross the boundaries and it entertains the whole
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world irrespective
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world, irrespective
 about knowledge of particular language used in the song. Best illustrated by the Latin songs gaining popularity across the
globe
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globe, although
although
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 half of the populace doesn’t know its meaning. To conclude, recapitulating the thesis, I have an opinion as every moment creativity is improved, eventually improvising the
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 as well. So the traditional
music
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 is of foremost
significant
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significance
, as it is the foundation of the modern
music
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 industry.
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