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Walking is known to be beneficial for health and yet fewer and fewer people are walking these days. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to tackle this problem?

#health #people
Walking is great exercise and truly it is very
benifical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for health.Walking in morning
time increase
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time, increase
stamina power
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stamina, power
 and It is highly recommended to walk to boost
immunie
relating to the condition of immunity
immune
 system of the body.Many medical person
beliefs walking
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beliefs, walking
 can release
stess
the relative prominence of a syllable or musical note (especially with regard to stress or pitch)
stress
sites
 of our daily life. Now in
this
 stressful life, many of us forget to walk due to our busy schedule. Work pressure is increasing gradually and its quite hard to get
time
 for exercise. We are finding ways for less
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 and trying to ease our energy consumption for Eg, we are taking Car/Motorcycle to reach at our workplace and spending
time
 in office as it is, same way back to home and in weekend
time
 just to relax at home.In ancient times people prefer to walk more and more and doing
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 bread and butter. In a conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 just want to say we need to do more physical activities to keep
ourself
Suggestion
our self
 fit.If is hard to get
time
 for the gym we can bring
treadmill
Suggestion
the treadmill
 at home and set
time
 for walking/running
initially
 5mnts is enough and we can increase the
time
 as well as speed
.
Accept space
.
 We can take public transport to go for offices and try to avoid own transportation
,
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,
it can help us for
little exercise
Suggestion
a little exercise
 and we feel fresh.
Also we
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Also, we
 need to encourage our own family members
for
Suggestion
to
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 and physical activities.
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