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Many customs and traditional ways of behavior are no longer relevant to modern life and not worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?

#customs #behavior #life
The world with years has been changing rapidly;
therefore
, new habits should replace
old ones
Suggestion
the old ones
 because of uselessness. Inasmuch as I think old
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is a basement for new, so I cannot agree with the topic statement.
Thus
, people cannot decline the fact that some rituals and traditions irrelevant
at
Suggestion
in
 the present. For the instance, a pagan belief or guidance by signs of nature.
Moreover
, some
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 become useless in a tendency developing of new technology.
For example
, to write a letter
by
Suggestion
with
 a feather or to harvest by hands.
However
, all these old fashion
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 return for the time being in modified form, so as in the past pagan priests pray to the Gods of nature today increase quantity people are doing the same but
labeled
bearing or marked with a label or tag
labelled
 it the belief of
Sun
Suggestion
the Sun
 or other titles.
Moreover
, in spite of new technology, harvesting by hands practice in many countries and provide
enhance
Suggestion
enhanced
 of people’s health. For the time being, modern world has
trend
shaped or conditioned or disciplined by training; often used as a combining form
trained
 banned old traditions because acquires new.
However
, around the world, many old celebrates combine with
new one
Suggestion
new ones
a new one
the new one
, and old traditions a little adapted to a new reality do not forget.
For example
, the New Year or the Christmas in Ukraine has old fashion traditions and modern one.
Moreover
, all new ways of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 have in their root old;
therefore
, people cannot ignore or forget archaic habits because it builds their new style of life.
Furthermore
, at the present, many countries keep or renew old villages or castles for demonstrating an old way of life and it increase popularity among people. In conclusion, I disagree with worthless and uselessness customs and traditional ways of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 because of they our roots and foundation of local culture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • hinder progress
  • social mobility
  • intrinsic value
  • cultural touchstones
  • upbringing
  • sense of identity
  • continuity
  • moral and ethical values
  • quaint
  • foster a sense of community
  • outdated
  • intrinsic
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