Some people think living in big cities is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction

By the time being, the tendency of urban sprawl has been growing,

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more and more citizens of megalopolises weigh positive and negative sides of influence on

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. I can partially agree,

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what's

bad impact outweighs good.

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Because of, big cities have a lot of transport

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as public and private, level of pollution there higher than in villages that lead to problems with lung.

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scientist researches show almost

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equal

air pollution

everywhere even

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everywhere, even

in a forest.

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, almost all vehicles noisy that

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leads

to problems with listening.

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, megalopolises crowded that means people stay close to each other many time that lead to faster spread diseases.

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, on a surface citizen of big cities more vulnerable to a problem with

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, if look deeply we could see more hospital and more opportunities for protecting

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. Because of, citizens of megalopolises could take faster medical help and each weekend are going to a forest on camping, bad influence big cities on

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will become

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equal

with people from villages.

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, today almost all small towns are located near a highway that means, perhaps, less noisy, but similar

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cities

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city

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air and other pollutions.

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such

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villages

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don't always have

good medical insurance, which sometimes more dangerous.

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, today’s influence on

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almost equal everywhere.

Conclusion

To sum up, in my opinion, no matter where you are living pollutions and super-viruses are findings us everywhere;

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, in big cities people have more chances

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heal than in villages.

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, I cannot completely agree with the topic statement.

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Mar 18, 2020

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Topic Vocabulary:

respiratory problems
population density
stress levels
mental health issues
sedentary lifestyles
healthcare facilities
cardiovascular diseases
psychological well-being
recreational areas
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