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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012.
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The line chart illustrates how many incidents of various types of crime which was happened in the Newport City Center from 2003 to 2012.
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, it is indicated that the least crime accrued all the
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it
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was a robbery in 2002,
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 the crime which had the most incidents was a burglary in 2004. It can be seen from 2003 to 2012
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 that both
of
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car theft and
a
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robbery followed almost the same trend. At the same time, the number of burglaries declined steeply. The robberies fluctuated from 2003 to 2012. To elaborate, it rose slowly to only under 1000
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 in 2005 from almost 750
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 in 2003
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 went down to the same number of
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 recorded in 2003 in 2008
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 to improve again to reach 2010
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 it decreases and rises in the
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 two years. There is a stayed constant
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numbers
car
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of car
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 theft in the first years,
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 it declined slightly in 2006 to rise slowly to 2750
times
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 in 2012. The burglary increased slightly to reach the highest number of
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, which was 37500 in 2004
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 it fell steeply until 2009 when it stayed stable nearly.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "steeply" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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