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in some countries , a few people earn extremely high salaries . some people think that it is good for the country, while others believe that government should limit their slaries and limit the amount people can earn . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that
difference
Suggestion
the difference
 between the salaries creates a gap in
society
. So, it is argued that earnings should be capped in order to remove huge
income
 disparity.
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
donot
Suggestion
do not
 agree with
this
 opinion, because economic inequality acts a force to motivate people to earn more. On one hand
,
Accept space
,
income
 disparity encourages people to work hard and achieve astronomical salaries. As it is a natural tendency of the people
to imitate
Suggestion
imitate
 the lifestyle of
upper class population
Suggestion
the upper class population
. People tend to achieve commodities which they own
such
 as luxury accommodation and vehicle, motivates ordinary people to make more money.
Therefore
, if limits are introduced on earning, the economic differences will disappear and
thus
 discourage people to work hard. Inability of workers to work hard ultimately
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the financial progress of the nation. All in all, applying the rule of controlling earning have long term negative consequences. Despite of its pros, some people consider it to have negative consequences. They reckon that
income
 should be limited so that there is no difference between haves and have nots in the
society
. It is considered that the people having high
income
 get their children well educated which are not in
range
Suggestion
the range
 of
ordinary worker
Suggestion
ordinary workers
the ordinary worker
an ordinary worker
.
This
 process
lead
Suggestion
leads
 to process that rich continues to be richer and poor continues to be poorer day by day.
However
,
this
 type of issue could be solved by the other measures
such
 as providing free and same quality of education to
whole
Suggestion
the whole society
whole societies
a whole society
society
.
Accept space
.
 To conclude
,
Accept space
,
 it can be stated it is not bad to have some affluent personalities in the
society
 as they serves the significant function to keep the whole community motivated and virtues of
income
 differences outweighs the vices.

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