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the charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries

the charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries
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The pie charts give information about how the world’s
water
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 is distributed,
whereas
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 the bar chart illustrates the percentage of
water
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 used in agriculture, domestic use and industry in three countries (Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada).
Overall
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, salt
water
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 makes up an overwhelming majority of the world’s
water
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. Fresh
water
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 is made up of
mainly
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main
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water
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 from ice and glaciers.
While
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 most
water
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 in Egypt and Saudi Arabia is used for agriculture, in Canada it is predominantly used for industry. The pie charts show that 97% of global
water
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 is salt
water
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 compared to a mere 3% which is fresh
water
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.
Water
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 from ice and glaciers accounts for 79% of all
fresh
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freshwater
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water
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 as opposed to
ground
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groundwater
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water
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 and surface
water
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 (20% and 1% respectively). The pie charts show that 97% of global
water
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 is salt
water
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 compared to a mere 3% which is fresh
water
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.
Water
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 from ice and glaciers accounts for 79% of all
fresh
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freshwater
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water
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 as opposed to
ground
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groundwater
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water
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 and surface
water
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 (20% and 1% respectively).

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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