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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this in the case? Is this good thing or a bad thing?

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In the modern era, outwear plays a vital role in judging the personality of individuals. Most of the population wants to look more attractive, and for
this
, they try to attire trendy costume in their routine life. In my opinion,
this
 practice will create negative impacts on society, and I will explain the issue with relevant examples in
this
 essay. The most adverse effect of the implication of the latest design dresses is to increase of inferiority complex among the people. Though fashion in a general sense is promoted by the way the celebrity dress, and people tend to follow them blindly, whether, it suits them or not.
For instance
, popular personalities perform a lot of hard work to maintain their physique and to look elegant, but people just mimic their dresses without putting
such
 efforts;
therefore
, they tend to fail to look like their ideal.
Consequently
, it will create destructive consequences of their behaviour.
Secondly
, it is unbearable for the gentry of the middle class to meet frequent variation in designs of clothes. Fashion is just like a wind, and it is changing rapidly with time.
For example
, a market survey executed by a group of business student of the University of Cambridge, UK tells that 75% articles about most of the branded companies become out of date monthly, and they introduce dresses of latest design
that is
 difficult for the common customer to purchase.
As a result
, it will influence financially for those who are fashion-conscious.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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