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Some people fail in schools, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in the case?

#people #schools #life #case
Down the centuries, the topic regarding success in
life
 grabs our immediate attention because of its universality. On the backdrop of
this
, it is widely believed that people who remained unsuccessful in schools performed well in real
life
 and their achievements are
outnumber
Suggestion
outnumbered
. There are copious reasons behind their accomplishments, and in my perception, these personalities have tremendous ability to utilize their learning and skills than others.
However
, let us dig out an enigma behind their fame. What are the contributing factors for success? We
can not
can not
cannot
 deny the importance of
education but
Accept comma addition
education, but
 to achieve something in
life
 practical approach and dedication is a major contributor.
For instance
, studying physics, chemistry or maths help us to understand their practical application in real
life
 by finding solutions even after several attempts, is surely one explanation.
Strong
Suggestion
Strongly
believe
Suggestion
believes
 in self, is another. But one factor has passed all but unnoticed, environmental effect. Theoretically, people who brought up among high achievers usually have big goals and tough competition to beat others. On the
flipside
Suggestion
flip side
, there is a considerable debate that people with strong academic background with
high
Suggestion
higher
 grades have more potential to succeed due to their addiction
of
Suggestion
to
 being number one.
Furthermore
, working hard during school in studies
help
Suggestion
helps
 them to have clear concepts with complete understanding of complex things. In the culmination of the above
discussion we
Accept comma addition
discussion, we
 may assert that failure in studies can not define failure in
life
. Achievements in
life
 depends on both, the education as well as on practical performance.
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