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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.
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The pie charts give information about the main causes that contributed to both
U.K
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UK
 immigration and emigration in 2007. İt is clear that the most significant reason that made
people
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 come to and
also
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 leave the U.K. was from
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the “definite
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 job”group, whilst “no reason stated” and “formal study” groups constituted the low percentages. Looking at the pie chart in more detail, the ratio of
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the “looking
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 for work” section’s contribution
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 immigration made up 30%, compared to just over a fifth of that for emigration. The percentage of
people
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 who immigrated or migrated without stating
reason
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the reason
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 accounted for 15% and 13% respectively.
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, the proportion of
people
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 who migrated for a definite job accounted for almost the same amount.
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, more than one in ten of
immigrants’
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the immigrants’
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 states belonged to
“other”
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the “other”
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 group, compared to 14% of emigrants.İnterestingly, there was a 2% difference between “accompany/join” groups,
whereas
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 almost a quarter of
people
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 migrated to Britain for educational purpose as opposed to 4% of emigrants. workout on mistake

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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