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the problems caused by work-related stress such as loss of productivity have become a concern for both employers and workers. what do you think are the main causes of work-related stress and how can they avoided?

The
stumblingblocks
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stumbling blocks
 are in workplaces have become a concern for managers and employees. There are some reasons and solutions to work troubles which are related to both employers and workers.
if
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If
 we look at problems of workers and managers, they are
assosiated
make a logical or causal connection
associated
associate
 with one another.
the
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The
 most significant aspect of working is arrangement which can rule a worker and reduce
adverties
called to public attention
advertised
advertiser
 in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
.
For
Linking Words
example limitation
Accept comma addition
example, limitation
in
Suggestion
on
worktime
Suggestion
work time
 and day provide starting and finishing work on
time
Use synonyms
. If there no any limitation of
time
Use synonyms
 in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
, managers can not manage
workfoce
Suggestion
the workforce
workforce
workforces
workflows
 and it brings about protest among employees. An equal salary and encouragement can inspire
empyoyees
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
 to work hard.
However
Linking Words
, it does not mean that all workers should be encouraged or should be given the same salary. In order to organise
this
Linking Words
, manager should divide workers according to their ability and knowledge, thereby every employee may get a salary and from
time
Use synonyms
 to
time
Use synonyms
 rewards depend on their capacity and knowledge. Stress of capital can be prevented by doing these.
Likewise
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 the main cause of melancholy is loss of
productivity which
Accept comma addition
productivity, which
 may be appeared by manager management and
consequense
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequence
consequences
 of
ill-configuration
Suggestion
the ill - configuration
 as well as solution to
this
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 is as
afforementioned
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
aforementioned
 excellent plan. I believe that a good plan and manager can be adequate for
deacreasing
becoming less or smaller
decreasing
 pressures in a workplace. In conclusion, there are several problems
which cause of stress
Suggestion
which cause stress
, whereas a wise employer and good worker
tacktics
the branch of military science dealing with detailed maneuvers to achieve objectives set by strategy
tactics
tactic
 may be an answer to these.

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