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The charts below show the result od a long-term survey carried out by an environment group into local wildlife population figures.

The charts below show the result od a long-term survey carried out by an environment group into local wildlife population figures.
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The provided blend of charts illustrates the information regarding the consequences of a survey conducted by an environment team
into
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on
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 a residential
population
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 of animals. It can be clearly seen that the main reason
of
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for
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Changes
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the Changes
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 in
wildlife
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the wildlife
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population
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 was habitat destruction which was 43%,
while
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 the minimum
changes
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 by the introduction of exotic species which was a tiny fraction. The proportion of local animal
population
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changes
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 by disease was 6%
besides
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 it,
changes
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 took by random factors
was
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 doubled by disease. 15% of
wild
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the wild
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 animal
populationpopulation
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population population
population-population
 affected by hunting and fishing and it was 6%less than
ovrexploitation
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overexploitation
. Probing
further
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, -43% of Change in
population
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 for bees which is 1 percentile more than butterflies. Skylarks, sparrows and owls
population
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 figures observed less than -5. The ratio of trout and salmon was over a quarter. The percentage change in
population
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 figures for wildlife
observes
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observers
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 for
bat
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bats
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 was 23,
whereas
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, for
otters
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,otters
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 there was a decrease to 9 and foxes was remain similar
as
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to
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 otters.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, changes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 6 times.
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