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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #life #history #source #information
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Nowadays, there is an ongoing debate between people believing that at present
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we cannot learn anything from the past while some believe that it provides valuable information about human
life
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. It is possible to claim that past experiences play an important role in
human’s on going
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the ongoing human life cycle
the human ongoing life cycle
human’s ongoing life cycle
human ongoing life cycle
human on going life cycle
life
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 cycle. There are several reasons that history of human
life
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 teaches a person, on how to deal and behave in situations and arising conditions.
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, I had
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
 a mistake by unknowingly throwing books outside the window which was a regretful decision, while I will see to it that the same mistake will not be repeated in future if I have to scrap any book.
This
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tells
express in words
says
 that if any incident has occurred in their
life
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 previously, people tend to take care of not repeating the same scenario in
future
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the future
. Those who argue that today the people cannot learn from their past has a different point of view. They generally think that people do not remember as they are busy in the current social world and fall prey to do the same thing again and again or they do it purposely.
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 depends on person to person as well as on
situation
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the situation
.
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, my friend continues to write a wrong spelling always, even after he is told the correct spelling.
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this
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This
 happens
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to
 him because he had ignored when he was
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 corrected. To conclude, while there are
stong
having strength or power greater than average or expected
strong
 arguments on both the sides, my personal opinion is that an occurred incident should be remembered and the decision must be taken
accordingly
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. I strongly recommend that people should learn from their past
life
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