Throughout history, male leaders have led us into violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders it will be more peaceful. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many are of the opinion the male inclination towards violence is the root of many international conflicts and societies ruled by women might be more peaceful. In my opinion,
this
is likely true. The reason that some oppose
this
seemingly sexist viewpoint is based on past examples of female leaders. The sample size is much smaller but leaders like Margaret Thatcher, Cleopatra, Hilary Clinton, Condoleezza Rice, Queen Elisabeth I, Joan
d’Arc
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D’Arc
and countless others have started, maintained, and escalated violent conflicts. There are very few examples of peaceful female leaders and those that exist can be matched proportionally with male leaders. The claim that women are more peaceful is not supported by historical evidence. A major caveat is that these are the exceptions and women rulers have held power in a world
otherwise
dominated by male hierarchy. It is impossible to know how peaceful the world would be if women held the majority of powerful positions.
Furthermore
, men are naturally predisposed towards aggression.
This
stems from both biology and society. Men produce more testosterone than women and
this
has been shown to increase aggressive tendencies and violent behaviour. Men can curb
this
instinct but
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instinct, but
it has the potential to undermine their better nature at any moment. There are
also
societal forces at work that play on men’s pride. From a young age, boys are raised to be tough, to not back down, to not compromise and to idealise violent heroes. The majority of male role models are violent, ranging from historic figures to action stars and even
videogame
characters. It is hard to disentangle the roles of nature and nurture
clearly but
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clearly, but
the end product of their combination is clear for both males and females. In conclusion, males are more violent and women would likely be more peaceful given the opportunity to rule
widely
in a wise manner
wisely
. The question of the desirability of ending all conflicts and its global impact is another matter.

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