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A lot of money is spent on repairing old building. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new ones. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#money #buildings #ones
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In recent days, people
has been spending
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have been spending
huge amount
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huge amounts
a huge amount
 of money by their old
buildings whereas
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buildings, whereas
 some others are believing that
this
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 money should be invested to rebuild those existing
structure
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structures
 from the scratch as a new
one
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. I think, if a little changes can assure that the building will be sustainable for a long
time
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time, then
then
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 it is less-money-wasting decision and
it
it is
it's
 not,
then
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 people should go for reconstruction. Repair buildings- the term makes sense when the existing building requires some small changes
in it
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in, its
in its
 like- upgrading sewerage system, door-locks, window and ventilator style or changing the pattern of the roof floor
from
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of
 mosaic
to
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of
 tiles or whatever related
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to
 minor improvements. In these particular cases, my opinion is, not to re-structure the existing
one
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 as a newer
one
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 might be possible to make it in a comparatively low costing. In fact, we can consult and be sure about the overall condition of the building with developers and architects whether the repairing is enough or not for a long run as well.
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, when we take plan for changing interiors, exteriors, room distributions and almost everything, if the overall look seems backdated, walls getting distempered and cracked,
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 we must go
for
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to
 rebuilding
the older
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the old
one
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 from the root again. On the top of that, if developers ensure the current situation is not well-sustaining and might be in a structural risk,
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 rebuilding the current
one
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 is obvious. I am currently living in a home built by my grandfather and saw my father has repaired
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 building on various occasions
withseveral
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with several
 concerns. Despite of having the sentimental attachment with the design is now,
this
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 is the time to build it again with a strong modernized¬¬ structure for our safety and security. It has been more than sixty years ago when it was built.
One
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 of my architect
friend
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friends
 suggested to
do
engage in
make
this
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 change immediately after checking our home the condition is no more to go
with
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to
further
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 repairing on it. In conclusion, spending money in an efficient way by understanding the condition of the old buildings weather these need to repair or rebuild would be the wisest way at least to accumulate the excessive waste on it.

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