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Some people think that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Major part of investment in a
country
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 is for
food
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. The investment might be for producing their
food
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 or to import their
food
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 from producing countries. The essay explains the positives of
food
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 production rather than exporting them.
Main advantage
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The main advantage
A main advantage
 of self production of
food
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 is low cost compared to exporting. There will be duty cost
for
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of
 all
exports which
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exports, which
 are extra charges. These can be eliminated if we start producing our
food
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. It is a very simple logic, say we go
for
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to
 a restaurant, we pay Rs 60 for a meal. But
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, when we cook for ourselves with all the raw materials in hand, we can have 3
meal
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meals
 at the equal cost. While we can save the investment as said above, we can
also
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 earn if we produce our
foods
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food
. Unemployment is always an issue in most of the
country
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,
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however if
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however, if
 we stop exporting
food
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, demand will increase and unemployed can effectively start their career
this
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.
This
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 is like a double bonus,
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country's economy
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the country's economy
a country's economy
 grows because of
increase
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an increase
 in employment,
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 the result,
that is
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, the
food
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 serves as useful
resourse
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
resource
 for the
country
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.
On
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In
 my view, it is always effective when we do our work rather than paying someone
to do
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doing
 our work. I,
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therefore believe
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therefore, believe
 producing our own
food
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 will increase our
country
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's economy and will
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 ensure a good and safe product.

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