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Some people think that the government should give money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree?

#people #government #money #artists #musicians
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a fart
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such
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craftmen
a professional whose work is consistently of high quality
craftsmen
 and instrumentalists are generally considered to be dependent on funding and
therefore
 society in some countries are believe that they have to be financially supported by government. I strongly agree with that statement because of the benefits they could bring to the world in general.The essay will
first
 look at how artists can help to solve some ethical issues and
then
 discuss the advantages they can bring to
nation
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the nation
a nation
. Speaking of musicians, according to statistics they are one of the most persuasive persons all over the world. Millions of people
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especially from
young generation
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the young generation
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follow them and their ideological values.
Thus
, by their art they can spread vital information to the public in order to increase their ethical knowledge and make them aware of global problems that are needed to be taken into account.
Consequently
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people of all ages begin to think globally.
Moreover
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music is the universal language of mankind. When words leave off, music begins
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in other words
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by
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
 music any human beings may find inner peace.
Hence
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it can work like a cure or even psychological support. Moving forward, performers not only affect
human's mind but
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the human's mind, but
the human's mind but
also
 may enhance government revenue. They somehow provide their motherland with a number of tourists
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to be more specific with their admirers who keen on seeing their idol's homeland.
Furthermore
, artists
also
 make a contribution in different charity organizations and so help to solve global issues. In conclusion
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even If talented individuals like musicians sometimes are considered to be
useless they
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useless, they
 can enrich a country's culture and so justifiably deserve to be financially supported.

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