Some people say that the internet is responsible for destroying social skills of teenagers and young adults. Why do you think the internet is seen as dangerous in this way and what can we do to ensure that it does not harm the social development of teenagers and young adults.

It is certainly true that
internet
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the internet
has revolutionised every facet of our life
,
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,
social life is no exception.
Therefore some
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Therefore, some
people hold an opinion,
internet
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the internet
has become the cause of our
youngester's
a young person of either sex
youngsters
antisocial behaviour.
this
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This
development is due to changes in our
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
by using
this
technology. To make it less destructive toward
society parents
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society, parents
should intervene to educate the children.
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To
commence with, the main reason
resposible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
to
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deem to be
consider
interner
a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange
internet
responsiple
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
for indifferent behaviour
towars
near
towards
our
socityet
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
societies
due to too much internet impede development of social activities
such
as meeting other people and participating in outdoor sport
.
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.
children
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Children
prefer to spend more time on screen rather than meeting other people they are
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Isolation
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Cyberbullying
  • Anonymity
  • Harassment
  • Social media
  • Superficial relationships
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Communication skills
  • Virtual validation
  • Self-esteem
  • Online communities
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital literacy
  • Awareness programs
  • Constructive use
  • Setting boundaries
  • Social development
  • Meaningful connections
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