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An increase in production of consumer goods results in damage of the natural environment. What are the causes and possible solutions?

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Today, we live in an era of continuously increasing
consumer
 demand.
This
 rate of consumption is increasing at an alarming rate.
This
 essay shall deal with the causes of increased
production
 of
goods
 and how it affects the environment and suggest some ways forward. The growing population is the primary reason for
consumer
goods
production
. As people increase, so does demand.
Furthermore
, globalization allows people to access choices. When they find a new product, they want it too.
Additionally
, people’s purchasing power has increased
due to
 developing economies.
Lastly
, manufacturers often produce cheaper
consumer
goods
 without compromising quality, resulting in the need to discard them after a short period of use. The
production
 and disposal of short-lived
consumer
goods
 contribute to more
waste
, which
further
 exacerbates environmental degradation. Improper
waste
 disposal can lead to air and water pollution.
Waste
 in landfills and incineration facilities
also
 releases emissions that contribute to climate change.
Consumerism
 suffers severe consequences. By 2050, urban
waste
production
 is expected to increase by 70%, which will exacerbate the landfill crisis caused by non-biodegradable
waste
 in landfills. Polluting materials
such
 as lead, mercury, and poisonous gases,
along with
 the destruction and recycling of plastic, contribute to environmental degradation. To reduce the damage caused by
consumerism
, people must be educated about its devastating consequences, encouraged to purchase only necessary items, and encouraged to use biodegradable materials. Industries should adopt alternative energy sources to reduce their carbon footprint, and proper
waste
 disposal methods must be implemented. In Sweden, the use of biodegradable packaging materials has resulted in a 30% reduction in non-recyclable
waste
, demonstrating the potential for positive change through concerted efforts. Summing up,
consumerism
 is rampant nowadays and has a detrimental effect on our environment, but steps can be taken to minimize the harmful effects of excessive
consumerism
.
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coherence cohesion
You've done well in introducing and concluding your essay. Enhance your conclusion by summarizing key points more distinctly and suggesting a compelling call to action or final thought.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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