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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
In recent years, governments spend money on railways because I think that railways are much faster. Peoples often use railways to get to dest
ination fas
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the destination
a destination
ter and cheaper. In my opinion railways have big demand of people, because not every people have priv
ate car.
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a private car
private cars
Therefore
, governments spend much money to railways rather than roads. In my country, do not attach importance to roads. Our roads are very broken with big holes, but it is not everywhere. We have big
track wit
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a big track
h ideal road where we can calmly ride and not worried about the car. My
second
 opinion, that maybe governments worry about our air pollution and specifically do not pay due attention, because air pollution is glob
al problem. Ca
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a global problem
rs release toxic carbon and kill fresh air. Everyday peoples breathe with
this
 toxic gases and have problems with their lungs. But railways do not have any bad sides. Railways works for energy and does not produce any gases. As I sad earlier railway is good and popular public transport. In conclusion, I want to say, governments should spend money on railways and roads identically, because it is vehicle of all people

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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