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successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In
this
 modern era, sports person is earning high income over the other professions. Many of the people think, that should be acceptable while some believe
that is
 unfair. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the both views and I would argue
that is
 not fair because many of them working hard, but they did not get proper needs
such
 as an appropriate salary. On the one hand, sports professional incomes are very high when compared to others. The main reason is they are working hard for many years due to
this
 they acquired many great skills. People who learn more skills they tend to be more successful in their life, especially in their salaries. For one clear instance, many sports players have become an overnight success in the age of 17 to 18 and
this
 was very difficult because many professions are becoming popular in their age of 40 or 50. By observing the sports person lives, they are investing their time only in games and it was followed many years.
Furthermore
, they represent their countries to participate in international competition
such
 as world cup.
As a result
, they are highly paid by their countries.
on
Suggestion
On
 the other hand, many professionals like doctors and researchers are
also
 working hard to improve the environment and public lives. Without them, we cannot survive in
this
 world. For example, in recent research shows European doctors salaries are only 1000 euro per month whereas some European football players earn more than 100 million euro per month. To conclude, it is acceptable for the sports person earning more income,
although
 many professionals who work for social are not getting their basic needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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