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Society is becoming obsessed with material goods like fast cars,designer clothes and flashy jewellery. We have stopped caring about the important things and that is why divorce rates are high and family bonds are not as strong anymore;our value system is disintegrating.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In todays worlds, Everyone is running behind their career and trying to upgrade their lives. In
this
 process, they are forgetting the actual meaning of life. I strongly agree with the statement, People are living more artificial life the real
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an organization of employees formed to bargain with the employer
union
. I shall be discussing in details about the same topic.
To begin
 with, There is a saying " Things need to be used and people need to be loved"
however in
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however, in
 the current phase, The exactly the opposite thing is happening. Non living objects are being admired and living soul is being used.
For instance
, Family was the most important factor
initially but
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initially, but
initially built
 with change in time basic values started to fluctuate and affection for one and
other
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the other
 is reducing drastically due to within generation, We are facing many separations. No two human are attached to each other, With the increase in artificial worlds of passion the unreal good, Mankind has turned to become a machine. They can easily move on with some other person, Its like replacing your old cell phone. When two adults, decide to part their ways, They do not consider the consequences of their decision. The only things which are important to them is that they cannot adjust with one and other or rather they can't compromise on the materialistic goods. Possessing material gives one a satisfaction of being rich and content. To conclude, Mankind is becoming more insensitive towards the bond they share and they are not loosing the most important factor in their lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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