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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

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In recent years in several areas over the globa
l, the
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globe
re has often been a lack of pure
water
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, but
this
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 is nowadays a world issue that an increase worldwide demand. Some factors have led to
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 rise, there are measures that authorities and individuals can take to solve
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 problem. Let's begin by looking at the causes of shortage of fresh
water
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. One of the main reaso
n is g
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reasons
lobal warming. As we know that
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 of high temperature the iceberg will thaw after that, the need will accrue.
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, another cause that the growing up over population. One of the most well-known Asian country is China. As the number of inhabitants overgrows in here the want for fresh
water
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 increases correspondingly.
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, several housewives waste a lot of potable
water
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 while washing dishes because they forget to leave the crane in the closed form
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, the amount of neat
water
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 is decreasing. Turning to the solutions of the argument.
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 governments and experts need to preserve the air temperature in no
rm
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at
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l level, for
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a normal level
normal levels
 to prevent the ice from melting. These days, domin
ions and indi
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dominions, and
viduals are disregarding to Chinese peopl
e
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people, hence
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, they should impose a tax on them for a lot of give
birt
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giving
h.
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, households need to fix the
water
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 counter when women use plenty of
water
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 after
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 a calculator rings
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, we conserve abundant
water
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.
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, as our ancestors said that
water
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- is a source of life. In the end, the abridgement of fresh
water
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 is a rising global issue, there are different means and methods available, by which both governments and individuals can avoid from worsening.
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