In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society? What is your opinion on that? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, the amount of older people has been increasing in many parts of

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the globe

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. There are more negative and

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positive

effects on our society. In my

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our society,

also

this

have several disadvantages. Let's begin by looking at the positives of the increasing of older people.

Firstly

, nowadays the share of older people is increasing because of improvement of medicine and science people are enjoying a longer life than before.

For example

, one of the famous country Japan, Japanese people live longer than other countries because there is the best condition, pure water and neat air.

In addition

, the more longer livers in the world that Japanese people. There is no doubt that

this

has improved people's lives and

this

would not have been possible without longer life. Turning to the other side of the argument, in some community older

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is considered

to be

burden

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burdened

For instance

, a family which is going to the trip in the remote locations, if in family have older people that grandparents,

as a result

of they deserted by your kids.

Finally

, if the proportion of older people will be

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located or moved above the surround or above the normal position

raised

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risen

, the household will live happy because every

kids

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kid

want

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wants

that their parents will live

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eternally

with them and enjoying from life. In conclusion, I personally

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that the rising of older people will be beneficial for all. Because, when a person who becomes old, he or she gets profit on our community.

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In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society? What is your opinion on that? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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