In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society? What is your opinion on that? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, the amount of older people has been increasing in many parts of
global
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the globe
globe
. There are more negative and
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
effects on our society. In my
opinion there
Accept comma addition
opinion, there
is
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are
more advantages
on
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of
in
our society,
also
this
have several disadvantages. Let's begin by looking at the positives of the increasing of older people.
Firstly
, nowadays the share of older people is increasing because of improvement of medicine and science people are enjoying a longer life than before.
For example
, one of the famous country Japan, Japanese people live longer than other countries because there is the best condition, pure water and neat air.
In addition
, the more longer livers in the world that Japanese people. There is no doubt that
this
has improved people's lives and
this
would not have been possible without longer life. Turning to the other side of the argument, in some community older
are considered
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is considered
to be
burden
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burdened
.
For instance
, a family which is going to the trip in the remote locations, if in family have older people that grandparents,
as a result
of they deserted by your kids.
Finally
, if the proportion of older people will be
rised
located or moved above the surround or above the normal position
raised
reused
risen
, the household will live happy because every
kids
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kid
want
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wants
that their parents will live
eternal
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eternally
with them and enjoying from life. In conclusion, I personally
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that the rising of older people will be beneficial for all. Because, when a person who becomes old, he or she gets profit on our community.
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