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Most people are not interested how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people to buy food?

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In
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 modernized society, several changes have taken place in various fields. One of which is
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. There is a wide variety of
food
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 generated. Some people think carefully what they eat and how their
food
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 has been produced.
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, others are only interested in the cost of the
food
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. As a personal opinion, I believe that how people pick
food
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 depend on many reasons.
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Obviously
,
price
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 plays an important role when people buy a product.
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, most of pupils and students who have yet to be able to earn money and still receive money from their parents tend to mind how much
food
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 cost. The people who are poor often don't even get
food
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, let alone the
price
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 of
food
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.
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, for people with limited economic resources, the
price
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 of
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 is
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 a problem It is
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 an indubitable fact that people purchase
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 not only how cheap they are, they
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 concern about how the product is processed and packaged or more generally the quality of the product. Some parents pay attention to how the
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 is processed.
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, they will not be afraid to spend large sums of money
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for
on
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 from big supermarkets and shops to ensure
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freshed
a first-year undergraduate
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 and peace of mind when eating. Another factor that will probably influence
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 choices is probably the country of production. In my country, people are quiet interested in
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. They often think that
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 imported from Europe will be of good quality and fresh. For
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 reason, they are willing to buy it even though it is more expensive than local products Taking all things into consideration, there
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are
 a number of reasons why people choose
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. But in general, they choose
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 by two criteria:
price
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 and quality.
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