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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.
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The two maps illustrate the main changes which have taken place in the town of
Stokeford
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 between 1986 and today. In general, it is
clear
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 shown
the
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that
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Stokeford
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 has
became
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become
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 a much more modern city, by constructing new retirement
house
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houses
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 and demolishing farmland. The first interesting alter is that to primary school in the middle of
Stokeford
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 has been enlarged and added 2 new buildings.
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Next
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 change is the large farmland which is located around
primary
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the primary
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 school was demolished in order to extend the road of
bridge
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the bridge
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. The large house in 1930 has destroyed and
it
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was converted into
retirement
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a retirement
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 home.
Furthermore
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, By 2010 the farmland west of
Stokeford
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 had been demolished. A final development is that
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the near
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near by
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nearby
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 post office used to be 2 small
shop
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shops
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,
however
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the shops
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shops
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shop
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 was transformed into a big post office.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stokeford with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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