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soem people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
last
years, pe
Suggestion
the last years
ople think that sharing
information
 related to the scientific research, business and academic departments it is valuable.
However
, some people think the complete opposite, that sharing everything, especially important
information
 it doesn'
t
 make any sense. In
this
 essay I will discuss both of the views and actually what is my opinion on
this
 question. In my view, I agreed that it is much better to don'
t
share
 important
information
 from these departments.
Also
, I believe that because people who work in these departments know much more than other people, whilst they don'
t
 have the suitable knowledge to deal and understand with those
information
. A good example is, as a biomedical scientist working in the scientific research, I used to
share
information
 with other people and friends about my department and quite frequently people were arguing for
information
 that may some of them did not understand in deep the importance of those
information
. After that, I decided to keep those
information
 for myself as it doesn'
t
 make sense to talk with people while they don'
t
 fully understand because of the lack of appropriate knowledge.
On the other hand
, some people believe
that is
 good to
share
information
 of critical working areas. Usually, it is often said, as many people know about a valuable
information
 as much will be the help and
also
 their opinion on the question.
For instance
, as I said above working in a scientific area, sometimes I do not expect from my close people to understand some of the key parts of
this
 job and its importance and difficulties, until my sister had an excellent opinion of how
this
 work should be done to avoid accidents.
Therefore
, sometimes it might be helpful to
share
info
rmation but tha
Accept comma addition
information, but
t it does not happen always. To sum up, I think the most important is to keep
information
 between each department, avoid the sharing with people each
information
 for a better scientific, business and academic world.
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