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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
Some people have a tendency to become vegetarian as it is better for the human body.
Although
 I agree that a vegetarian diet is healthier, I do not believe that everyone should stop eating
meat
 in order to have good health. There are many reasons why becoming a vegetarian is beneficial.
Firstly
, science has proven that people who are vegetarians tend to be lower risks of several chronic illnesses
such
 as heart diseases, high blood pressure or obesity.
This
 is because of a healthy vegetarian diet which is low in fat and high in fibre.
Secondly
, people who do not eat
meat
 protect the environment and resources. Our planet is heating up as the global warming. By replacing
meat
 with vegetarian sources of protein, (nuts, seeds, beans,
for example
), we can reduce carbon and other greenhouse gas emissions.
However
, there are some disadvantages to take into consideration before becoming a vegetarian. If a vegetarian’s daily meals are not balanced, he or she might suffer from a lack of calories to meet his or her energy needs.
This
 would make a sense of tiredness or unjustified anger and
consequently
, they are unable to do anything energetic.
In addition
, vegetarians often have a harder time than
meat
 eaters as there is not so much choice in restaurants or canteens.
Therefore
, they have to cook at home by themselves, which is believed that a waste of time or money. In conclusion,
although
 healthy, a vegetarian diet is not for everyone and it requires to be careful in the choice of food and preparation of meals.
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