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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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Information machinery plays a significant role in daily activities which is altering various aspects of lives. I believe that the merits of information automation are far more than its demerits. Some traditionalists think that IT is endangering their way of living;
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, I personally believe that its advantages are far more than its disadvantages.
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 with, the advantage of automation lies in the fact that it has helped people become more social and have more relations with each other; more specifically, communication technologies abolish distances and enable everyone to connect around the globe.
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, many people have been able to reconnect with long lost friends through the network
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 of visiting each other face to face due to
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 lives become easier than before and automation provides people with various entertainments.
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, in doing house chores,
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 allows people to do their chores more conveniently and easily compared with the past.
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, housewives do not need to go out for buying goods; they stay at home and buy their materials online. •
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,
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 has some negative effects on our lives; because of
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, people’s activities decrease dramatically, so using
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 results in gaining weight and becoming fat and obese, leading to serious diseases
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 as diabetes and blood pressure;
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, it makes people lazier, so
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 affects their health and fitness because more and more people are taking up watching TV or surfing net
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 of playing sports. Spending time on video games or online games make children waste their time. In conclusion,
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 changes people’s lives both positively and negatively.
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, we cannot deny the benefits of
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