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Some people think money is the best gift to give youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #money #gift #youngsters
Nowadays,
money
 is needed by everybody. It's a well-known fact that we can't live without pay, especially is the youngsters. Gradually, people use
fund
Suggestion
the fund
funds
 as a present to the other. The central question
then
 becomes: Is
money
 the best gift to give youngsters
?
Accept space
?
 The common view of everybody,
money
 is the perfect choice to give. The youngsters have classes to
graduating
Suggestion
graduate
 and
then
 they will find a good job. They always take part in trend with everybody in
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
, parties, occasions,.. So they need a lot of
money
 to pay for fee, clothes, electronic devices,... Because the youngsters can't earn
money
 enough to pay for what they need, so the
money
 is always the best present for them. In an other hand

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