Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

It is trusted by most of people that the most famous social networking sites which is named Facebook impacts a large disadvantage on both individuals and society. In my point of view, there
has
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have
more positives for them and in
this
essay, I will discuss negatives and advantages below. Let’s begin by looking at the positives of the argument. In recent years, many and many people are using social networks and they are bringing benefits and comforts for individuals and society because if someone will join the Facebook, after
that
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that, this
this
person can see variety of news which are being happened around the world and they
also
can read different comments which people are writing every minute.
However
, when someone will see these comments, they will be
rhetor
on the contrary
rather
return
because
this
man always sees many sentences.
Moreover
, individuals from watching
videos
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the videos
they can learn many professions namely carpentry, pottery, weaving.
Finally
, and
also
Facebook teaches some of sport styles and especially secrets
such
as football, basketball and others. Turning to the other side of the statement.
Initially
, these days I am seeing many events
such
as some teenagers are going to Syria because of terroristic and extremism videos.
For example
, there are many terroristic, terrible videos on social
networks which
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networks, which
were added by people. Because, they can learn and
also
, they do like these things from watching those videos.
Finally
,
as a result
of
they
objective case of they
them
will be
terror
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a terror
in foreign countries. Overall, I personally disagree with
this
statement because I think that social networks are more helpful
as a result
of people can complete their vital chores, business works and outer political works.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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