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Discuss about positive and negative affect of tourists

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Annually many tourists everywhere in the world and travel to the whole of the Earth we want to discuss about the positive and negative impact of The Tourists nowadays every country in the world depending on the tourists that meaning they don't have any any industry and economic jobs to do and tourism is their income so they have to admit the bad negative from
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 industry that include illness and molesr their environment and animal generally
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 industry has a benefit and harm to increase benefit and reduce harm we should do important things
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 write a recommendation for tourists and explain for them or put fine for every mistake
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 if one of the tourists dropped the occupation on the floor or he or she has to pay fine and every infractions
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 as a drawing or writing Memento on a statue or antiguities. That's my idea about
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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