The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
A
vived
glance can be provided at the diagram reveals the information about three stages of Correct your spelling
vivid
life
cycle of Add an article
the life
salmon
which includes large
Add an article
the large
a large
type
of fish.
First of all,the reeds Fix the agreement mistake
types
which
located above the river move slowly, during about 5-6 months Correct pronoun usage
apply
salmon
eggs exist between small stones.After than
, Correct word choice
that
length
of 3-8 cm Correct article usage
a length
salmon
fry appears. Approximately among
4 years fry lives lower of the river which flows fast.Following, Change preposition
apply
growing
stage is Add an article
the growing
average
Correct article usage
the average
salmon
which is named smolt.After
this
period, 12
to 15 cm smolt is born.Correct article usage
a 12
Subsequently
, during about 5 year-period smolt goes up to the open sea.Consequently
, length
Correct article usage
a length
70
-76 cm of adult Change preposition
of 70
salmon
appears.
It can be inferred that,
for maturing of Remove the comma
apply
salmon
requires approximately 10 year-period
.After these Correct your spelling
year period
stages
big species of fish can sail in the sea.Add a comma
,stages
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