The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
A
vived
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vivid
glance can be provided at the diagram reveals the information about three stages of
life
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the life
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cycle of
salmon
which includes
large
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the large
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type
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types
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of fish. First of all,the reeds
which
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located above the river move slowly, during about 5-6 months
salmon
eggs exist between small stones.After
than
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that
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,
length
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a length
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of 3-8 cm
salmon
fry appears. Approximately
among
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4 years fry lives lower of the river which flows fast.Following,
growing
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the growing
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stage is
average
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salmon
which is named smolt.
After
this
period,
12
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a 12
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to 15 cm smolt is born.
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, during about 5 year-period smolt goes up to the open sea.
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,
length
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70
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of 70
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-76 cm of adult
salmon
appears. It can be inferred that
,
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for maturing of
salmon
requires approximately 10
year-period
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year period
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.After these
stages
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,stages
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big species of fish can sail in the sea.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.
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