Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?
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attractiveness
rather their hard work and efforts which can send negative effect to the Suggestion
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society
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now a days
, young people are being intrigued by the attractiveness and lavish the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
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of popular people in Use synonyms
society
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life
.
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firstly
there are many celebrities who are famous because of their looks and Linking Words
attractiveness
and their Suggestion
attractive
behavior
often has an adverse influence on the teenagers. They send out the message that in order to be popular, they have to be rich and beautiful. There are some who do not even mind in engaging acts which are disgraceful only to grab attention of the manner of acting or controlling yourself
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media
. Suggestion
the media
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bad example
to the Suggestion
a bad example
society
and his fans.
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Secondly
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with out
realizing their efforts and hard work to become in absence of
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an
celebrity.
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an
perception about Suggestion
a
life
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however
they should realize that celebrities Linking Words
wont
earn money and fame Suggestion
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wants
life
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