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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits.

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In today’s world, most of the people are involved in a particular game, they are watching different types of game
such
 as cricket, football and baseball.These games are played by all over countries' populations.
On the contrary
side
, some people thinking,
this
plural of "this"
these
 things are not important, because the international sporting
event
 is coming with more problems.Before commenting on giving statement,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss about the both of point of view in following paragraphs.   In the recent survey based on worldwide and found that, almost all countries are organizing 5 to 7 international sports events in one year, because of public demand and for some business.While particular country is host one international sport,
this
 country
also introduce
Suggestion
also introduces
 their culture, hand arts and other related programs and country humans are earning some money from sporting
such
 as a business selling food and flakes, hand made products and other related things.
Furthermore
, if countries are organising an international
event
, due to which point countries ate more popular in the world.
In addition
, they make more job opportunity,
this
plural of "this"
these
 things are more important for society and the individual.  
On the other hand
, some people defend that given statement,
therefore
 they do not aware about the advantages of international sporting
event
. They are watching only one
side
 and only disadvantages.They think, while international
sports conducting
Accept comma addition
sports, conducting
 by their countries, at that time some foreign people are coming into their countries with their culture, as the reason they believe
this
 thing are not important.
Moreover
, some people fear fir international diseases, because they think international sportsmen and sportswomen are coming with medical problems. To sum up the discussion, each and every coin has two
side
Suggestion
sides
, in my opinion international sporting is important for countries' development and
this
plural of "this"
these
 things are increasing GDP.On the other
side
, those people are thinking,
this
plural of "this"
these
 things are coming with problems, in my view, government are conducting some programs and teach about advantages for
event
Suggestion
the event
an event
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
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