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In some countries, people are increasingly becoming vegetarians. Do the advantages outweigh it’s disadvantages?

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In a number of places around the earth, an increasing number of people are turning into vegetarianism. While there are some disadvantages of
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 in terms of
health especially
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health, especially
 low intake of
protein
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,
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 essay believes that the positive impact of vegetarianism on environment outweighs any of
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
drawback
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drawbacks
. Some people fear that
vegetarian
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a vegetarian diet
diet
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do not provide
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does not provide
adequate amount
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adequate amounts
an adequate amount
 of
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protein which
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protein, which
 is required by
human body
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the human body
. It is a known well fact that animal meat is a source of
protein
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 and
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 is extremely useful in building a strong immunity.
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,
Indian health Association
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the Indian health Association
 recommends that everyone should consume 100gms of
protein
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 every day to sustain an optimal human health.
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, there are other vegetarian source of
protein
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 like pulses and tofu are excellent alternatives and should be considered to eat
instead
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. One of the evident benefits of
plant-based
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a plant - based diet
plant - based diets
diet
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 is the fact it does not have adverse effects on the environment. Unlike
meat-based
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a meat - based diet
diet
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, vegetarian food does not excessive resources and land to grow the food, and
moreover
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, it releases less carbon footprints.
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, raising a bull would require 10000 gallons of water a week in comparison of growing a plant which would require only 10 gallons.
Therefore
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, it is clear that there is more spending and ill- effects
on
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of
 raising a livestock animal than to grow plants I feel
advantages
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the advantages
 of eating plant-based
diet
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 outweighs any of
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 disadvantages. In conclusion, many do not consider vegetarian
diet
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 do not provide sufficient
protein
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, I believe
the less harmful
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the least harmful
 effects on
environment
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the environment
 outweighs any of
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 disadvantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vegetarianism
  • Plant-based
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Conservation
  • Ethical considerations
  • Animal welfare
  • Socioeconomic impacts
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Stigma
  • Awareness
  • Awareness
  • Informed choices
  • Livestock farming
  • Meat production
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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