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You borrowed something from your friend, later it got damaged. Write letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: apology about the issue tell how it got damaged say you are going to fix this issue.

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Dear Tasmina, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to apologize regarding the camera which I had borrowed from you
last
 week. I feel dreadful after what happened. I know how much it means to you, and I am incredibly sorry about that. Let me explain how it happened. I had the camera with me all the time, as you said, but it happens as
such
 that I was taking a picture, and I got a pushed, which was unintentional by my uncle, and the camcorder fell off my hand, and so the lens got damaged. I know I should’ve been more careful, but it just occurred in a fraction of a
second
. After that, I took it right away to the company store, which was nearby. He examined the camcorder thoroughly and suggested that the lens cannot be repaired and had to get it replaced, so I placed an order for that, and it shall arrive in two to three days. Fortunately, all the memory is safe, and none of them got deleted. I do apologize, and I would let you know as soon as it gets repaired, and I would personally come to give it back to you. I hope you understand. Regards, Shakib
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