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Some people believe that educational success is based on good teachers and others believe that it depends on students' attitudes. Discuss both the views.

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Some people think that scholastic achievement is based upon qualified mentors while others think it is derived from individual efforts. In
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 essay, I am going to examine both points of view and
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 give my perspective on the matter. On one side of the arguments, there are some people who argue the benefits of qualified instructors considerably outweigh individual efforts. The main reason for believing
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 is that satisfactory teachers know where to focus on learning in the short term to get the best result. It is
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 possible to say they can provide the most effective comprehension for students in some fields. A good illustration of
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 is when I studied English in South Korea, good teachers always emphasized the importance of having actual English conversations than reading grammar books.
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 possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact, people can be successful by studying themselves. People often believe
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 opinion because they believe students must stand themselves in the long run even though they started learning theory with a bit of help. A
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 point is that there have been no always good teachers for everyone. A particularly good example here is that the director who nurtured a world-class footballer might be the worst for other footballers. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
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, I feel that individual efforts are more demanding than being taught by great teachers because students can make a difference themselves and 'good' mentors cannot be 'good' for everyone. Given
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 situation, it is recommendable for students to have a regular self-education time every day, thinking of what methods can be the best suited to them.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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