Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past, which reduces their activity levels accordingly. Why is this case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

In
modern era
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the modern era
, technology brings drastic
chage
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
change
in dwellers life. Nowadays, toddlers spent their most
time
on watching television as
compare
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compared
to ancient
time
as well as they do less physical activity. I will articulate the reasons and solutions of aforementioned notion in upcoming paragraphs with relevant epitome. To commence with, there are manifold of
issue why
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the issue, why
the issue why
children's watch more television.
First
and foremost is they found it interesting to
spent
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spend
their
lesuire
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
because television channels broadcast distinct type of programmes.
Moreover
, parents force them to score good in studies and give less
time
to play outdoors games. If children do not obey
they
of them or themselves
their
parents and play outdoors games more, their parents punish them for it. Paradoxically, every lock
have
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has
a key and there are various
solutionsto
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solutions to
solve
this
problem.
Initially
, parents should give more
time
to children's for play physical games apart from
this
they should encourage toddlers to take participation in sports.
For example
, many times children's
intrested
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
in sports and they do
good
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better
in sports rather than studies.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, teachers
should be teach
Suggestion
should teach
should be taught
students practical as well as organise physical activities to know whom pupils are good in activities. To conclude that parents and children's are equally responsible for
this
and their joint hand to hand and take some suitable steps to overcome
this
hurdle.

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