Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The rising
cost
of university studies is a concern among many recent graduates leading to a differing views regarding the same. While some are of the opinion that
education
is a fundamental right and the government has to provide it free of
cost
, others suggest that the full
cost
of one's
studie's
be a student; follow a course of study; be enrolled at an institute of learning
studies
studios
studs
should be borne by the student himself. I fully agree with the former viewpoint that the
state
has
pivotal role
Suggestion
a pivotal role
to play in the
education
due to rising costs and
disparity
Suggestion
disparities
the disparity
amongst
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
citizens. During the recent years, the
cost
of
education
has increased manifold, which has led to only
few sections
Suggestion
a few sections
of the society having access to the same. As per recent studies, only 40% of school graduates end up taking higher
education
due to exorbitant costs.
Furthermore
, many students end up taking huge student loans and load up their credit cards which again
aggrevates
make worse
aggravates
aggravate
the problem because many of them fail to land in good jobs and thereby carry the debt burden for many years.
Additonally
Suggestion
Additionally
, if the
state
does not take up
this
responsiblity
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
,
Accept space
,
a less fortunate person or
underprivileaged
lacking the rights and advantages of other members of society
underprivileged
person tends to remain in the same condition.But,
education
can
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
income levels of
this
strata of the population causing them to contribute in
form
Suggestion
the form
of higher taxes and thereby higher revenue's to the
state
.
Hence
, I strongly advocate the fact that the
state
can fund the
education
of its citizens and once they are part of the workforce they could contribute to the society in terms of taxes and above all in
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
the productivity of the country.
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