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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries
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It is often argued that it is not possible to help every person and each nation will be only focus in help its own countries. Personally, I disagree with
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 point of view and I think that efforts have to be made to try to bring support. On one hand, is understandable the side of resolve only our concern. Each country has a large list of current problems to be faced and the success of it depends on the work of each society to grant optimal standards for every citizen.
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, taking poverty as a common problem, volunteer, campaigns and special programs can be organized to do charity work for people who need more. In
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 way, the logistics and planning would be much easier in each town rather than the countries that are miles away from the point. Indeed, even the action and support are received quickly. Despite the mentioned above, I still believe that actions have to be taken trying to help others. A greater number of countries are experimenting more serious problems
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 as civil war, extreme poverty, malnutrition, among others. In
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 way,
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 representations of unity like donations can make a difference, even the smalls may cause a positive impact for those communities.
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, and most importantly, we have an obligation to help those who live beyond our national borders, as a mankind, efforts have to be made in order to preserve the life of our peers. By way of conclusion, national boundaries should not stop us from helping those who are in need over the world as a gesture of humanity.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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