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Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extend do you agree with this opinion?

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No one can deny the importance of
education
, but nowadays many children cannot go to
school
 because of their low economic conditions.
Therefore
education
 should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of
education
, from primary
school
 to tertiary
education
, should be free. From my perspective, I agree it is vital everyone is educated.
However
, I disagree that every level should not be paid for. On the one hand, the government does not waste
money
 on nonsense things
instead
 of spending
money
 for children to go to
school
. There are a lot of smart children do not go to
school
 and
that is
 the reason why their generation after generations are still in difficult situations so that if the fee of schooling is free, those children can go to
school
, later, they support their family with better conditions. As you know, children are future of the country,
thus
 children deserve to be educated.
Besides they
Accept comma addition
Besides, they
 construct country much better.
On the other hand
, it is unnecessary to provide an amount of
money
 for children to study university. At the age of 18, those children start to take responsibility for their actions especially their life.Do not have to get tertiary
education
, they can choose variety kinds of job like bartender, flight attendant, actor,..
without
Suggestion
Without
 university degree. They will be trained and be
gotten
Suggestion
getting
 their job certificate.By that, they can find
money
, live
on
Suggestion
with
for
 themselves. In conclusion,
education
 is a basic need of all people, so it should be free from primary
school
 to tertiary
education
.
Besides
 it is more suitable if free to high
school
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible
  • economic backgrounds
  • primary school
  • tertiary education
  • free education
  • fundamental right
  • social mobility
  • economic mobility
  • reduce inequality
  • financial barriers
  • educational opportunities
  • government funding
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