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More and more students at university today are not choosing to study science. Why is this happening? What are the effects of this?

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In recent times there has been a sharp decline in university students opting to study
science
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 and it has been a reason of concern as it is reducing the number of
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 professionals in the world considerably.
Science
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 is being considered as a demanding subject which requires the students to exhibit strong determination and patience to master the subjects.
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 we find students who show keen perseverance in exploring the world of
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science but
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science, but
 at
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 day and age, it is becoming difficult for many students
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maintain
 their patience and focus
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 finding success in the field of
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.
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 a study shows that the average time span for a student to be focused on a particular subject has reduced drastically, which thereby impairs their ability to concentrate and is one of the major reasons why university students are not keen to opt for
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 subjects. Another reason can be the education costs involved in pursuing
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 as a career are soaring as each year passes which puts a lot of burden on students financially as the student loans pile up and scares them away from pursing the stream. And the effects of the same are significantly felt in the society as a whole as we are falling short on professionals like scientists, doctors and engineers who are the most essential groups of professionals to take human civilization to new heights
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 during pandemics when there is a high need of these workers we don't have enough. To conclude, I think a collaborated effort is required both from the governments and the universities in making sure that we encourage youth to opt for
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 as a career to maintain the equilibrium.
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