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Kilometres travelled and the distribution of vehicle types in Britain from the year 1990 to 2010

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The provided line graph
describe
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describes
different type
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a different type
different types
 of vehicle through people travelled
number
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a number
 of kilometres in
average month
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an average month
 in Britain from the year 1990 and 2010. As looking more closely to graph is, that in 1990 there were travelling highly for transport at 6100 kms and after
next
 five
years it
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years, it
 at peaks continuing for
upto
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up to
 2000 kms and
then
 it goes down in
last
 year 2010 on six thousand km.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, if consider
next
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the next purpose
purpose
 of travelling was commuting were slightly lower than
delivery but
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delivery, but
 much more than personal travel. It begins at 3100 kms and few rise even after that it goes falling more in 2010. Moving to
further
 details, the personal travel
were
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was
lowest
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lower
 than all other travelling
purpose
 and it
reflect
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reflects
 that most of people
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
 fewer km for personal preference only at 1800 kms and only raise at two hundred km for continuing 10 years and it
show
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shows
 few
raise
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raises
 in 2010 at 2200kms. Overall, the transport and delivery
purpose
 were highest among all of them and personal travel were lowest
purpose
 for travelling.

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