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Air transport is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is good other believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, everywhere we can see some fruits and vegetables which are not available in many countries and use increasingly
air
 transports to
export
 these products. Many people say that it’s good while others say that it’s not justifiable. Despite these drawbacks, I believe that these products should be available for everyone. To outline the advantages of using
air
 transport to
export
 the fruits and vegetables we can say;
First
 of all,
export
 of these ingredients is really useful for local residents. Because it is beneficial to many farmers in the country to acquire their business. Thanks to
this
, they will become independent.
Additionally
, since many citrus fruits come in, people's health has improved. Because fruits
such
 as kiwi, banana, orange are insanely rich in vitamins that are needed in our body.
Finally
, transportation provides many people with work. As more countries
export
 fruits and vegetables, so more people are hired.
On the other hand
, some people believe that using
air
 transports for
this
 purpose is not b
est idea.
Suggestion
the best idea
 There are several reasons for people's discontent.
First
, the use of
air
 transport pollutes the
air
 and negatively affects the environment. It is really harmful to human life and health.
S
econd reason
Suggestion
The second reason
is that, for the
export
 of one flight of products, a large number of resources
such
 as energy, carbon dioxide, fuel, oil are used. In the end,
this
 will lead to poverty of the state at the expense of
such
 underground resources. To sum up,
although
 many people think that using
air
 vehicles for transportation is not g
ood idea,
Suggestion
a good idea
 but i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am sure
this
 has some advantageous for many parts of the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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