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Studies have shown that in many countries the income gap between the rich and poor is ever increasing. What problems can arise from this situation and what could be done to address this situation?

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It is evident that, these days in many developing nations, the distance is widening between rich and poor when it comes to their earnings.
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problems
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problem
 and will
also
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 suggest some solutions to tackle the same.
Growing income gap
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Growing income gaps
The growing income gap
 between poor and rich people leads to arise many problems in any
country
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.
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 will
afflicit
have an effect upon
affect
 the society.
More over it
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Moreover, it
Moreover it
 would impact on
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country’s economy
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the country’s economy
 too. For any
nation social
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nation, social
 inequality obstacles the growth of the
country
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’s economy and
Government’s
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the Government’s
 would face
lot
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lots
 of challenges to
control
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 economic problems
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 as price hikes, demand and supply chain disruption etc. If inflation goes out of
control
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, poor people would suffer to afford basic needs like food, water and
shelter etc
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shelter, etc.
shelter etc.
 required for them to survive everyday life and
un
located at or attached to
on
an
in
 affordability of these essential things would create other serious problems like
in tolerance
impatience with annoyances
intolerance
, protests raised by poor people. All of
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 happening in a
country
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 can create political instability or crisis, having no
control
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 on
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 can lead to civil wars.
Goverments
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Governments
 should take necessary actions in order to
control
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 the income gap between
welathy
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
, middle class and low class people.
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 Government should
control
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illeterature
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literature
illiterate
 in the
country
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 and come up with skill development schemes for mid and low class
people which
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people, which
 will help them to build
necessary skill
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the necessary skill
 set to get a job which in return improves the earning capacity and to have a good affordable social economic life.
Goverments
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Governments
 should come up with the policies where minimum wages
needs
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need
 to be paid for the people irrespective of
type
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the type
 of job they do to meet their living standards.
Goverments
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Governments
 should collect more taxes from
welathy
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
 people and spend that money for job creation, build good infrastructure, establish industries and provide
finanace
involving financial matters
financial
 support and encourage skilled people among middle and down trodden classes to build
good balanced society
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a well balanced society
well balanced society
better balanced society
. In a conclusion, For any
country
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, social equality among all classes of people is a key for the growth of the
country
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’s economy and government should create an environment where people in a
country
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 can live with equal social economical life.
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