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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there for this problem?

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In recent years, the one of the hugest threats to our environment
are
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is
 global warming. In my point of aspect, I will give reasons and keys to
this
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 issue below. Let’s begin by looking at the causes of the argument. These days, many people, animals and their habitat to
are
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be
 undergoing from different global warmings because people throw much amount of variety trash every day to sea and river
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 of a
fishes
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fish
 and other ocean species are dying. Nowadays, the
forest
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 is being as a cause of heat weather and especially when people go to
forest
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 for travelling and having a rest from a habitat, they light fire and at night and at the finish trip they forget to put out the fire
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 of
forest
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 will bury
for example
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, approximately six
moths
one of the twelve divisions of the calendar year
months
 ago was
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forest fire
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a forest fire
 in continent Australia because there is heater weather. Following that, as I said above one of the largest continent is Africa, there is being a lack of fresh water and people are drinking dirty water as reason of hot weather. Turning to the other side of the essay.
Firstly
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, individuals must not allow to enter or having a rest to people in the
forest
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. If someone enters to there,
governments
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the governments
 must impose a tax on them. Some people hurled variety of rubbish on water
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 of animals will die
therefore
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 individuals must alert them if it will be returned again, he should be sentenced to 15 days in jail. In conclusion, in my
opinion if
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opinion, if
 individuals will be responsible for them, it would be beneficial. Governments can not afford them as
a consequence of they
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a consequence, they
a consequence they
 will return it again.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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